homework
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Hi Irene!
Have a nice weekend and enjoy the age party!
See you on Monday!
ESSAY: It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In my opinion, traditional cultures will not be lost as technology advances, it will develop and change to be adopted acording to needs of new generations.
Many countries still keep and follow their own old traditional cultures. For example, Korean still cook and eat Kimchi, Jews still discuss in every classes as a way of education. Japanese have ancestral shrine in their own house. We celebrate every holiday since we were born.
However, I can find that some traditional cultures minimize to practical way such as I wear traditional wear 'HanBok' only in a special day.
Woo, Irene
Every Toppics you gave me are very hard to think and write in English. I am fully encouraged already to study English.KKK
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Happy Friday! Thanks for your greetings. I will share about the event on Monday. ^-^
T. Irene.
Hi Irene!
Have a nice weekend and enjoy the age party! >>> Have a nice weekend and enjoy the coming of age party!
See you on Monday!
>>> Correct.
ESSAY: It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
ESSAY: It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In my opinion, traditional cultures will not be lost as technology advances, it will develop and change to be adopted acording to needs of new generations.
>>> In my opinion, traditional cultures will not be totally lost as technology advances. However, it may develop and change according to the needs of new generations.
Many countries still keep and follow their own old traditional cultures.
>>> Correct.
For example, Korean still cook and eat Kimchi, Jews still discuss in every classes as a way of education.
>>> For example, Koreans still cook and eat Kimchi while Jews still passionately discuss every topic in the class.
Japanese have ancestral shrine in their own house.
>>> Japanese still keep their ancestral shrines in their homes.
We celebrate every holiday since we were born.
>>> We continuously celebrate every holiday that existed even before we were born.
However, I can find that some traditional cultures minimize to practical way such as I wear traditional wear \'HanBok\' only in a special day.
>>> However, I have seen that traditional cultures are a bit changed to more practical and modern ways. For example, nowadays, traditional wearing of \'HanBok\' only happens on special days.
Woo, Irene
Every Toppics you gave me are very hard to think and write in English.
Every Toppics you gave me are very hard to think and write in English.
>>> Every topic you gave me were very hard to answer in English.
I am fully encouraged already to study English.KKK
>>> Correct.
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