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2018-11-06 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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As of the best memories with my sister, it was traveling in Germany when my sister has lived. After my military service when I had several months left to go back to school, I just left to Europe to see the world. During the trip, I could talk to my sister about various topics such as religion, marriage and so on. It was really long time to see each other after she went to Germany for studying viola, I recalled the intimacy with her I used to have in very young age.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


I\'m happy to hear about you and your sister\'s bonding.

I hope you two are still close up to this day. ^^

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and memories.

See you in our next class!



~~t. Ally




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As of the best memories with my sister, it was traveling in Germany when my sister has lived.

>> One of the best memories with my sister was when I travelled to Germany where my sister lived.


After my military service when I had several months left to go back to school, I just left to Europe to see the world.

>> Ater my militaryy service, I had several months left before I had to go back to school, so I just for Europe to see the world.


During the trip, I could talk to my sister about various topics such as religion, marriage and so on.

>> During the trip, I was able to talk to my sister about various topics such as religion, marriage and so on. 


It was really long time to see each other after she went to Germany for studying viola, I recalled the intimacy with her I used to have in very young age.

>> It\'s been a really long time since we saw each other after she went to Germany to study the Viola. I recalled the bond I used to have with her when we were younger. 

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