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2018-11-06 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Question: Does true loyalty require unconditional support? Why or why not? I think true loyalty doesn't mean unconditional and unquestioning support. True loyalty is the mind that hope the those we are loyal to could go to the right way and act the right thing. If we won't be critical to those we are loyal to, they will do whatever they want, and they could do something wrong in the end. Maybe they won't do something wrong.Nevertheless, we must be critical of those, since there is a possibility that they would change their mind to wrong way due to bad influence outside. So, if we love them, we have to be critical from an objective standpoint. If an organization do illegal thing, the member should speak up their voice. If an individual is willing to do bad thing, people who are loyal to him/her should make them stop it. True loyalty leads those we are loyal to to the right way. They should be a complementary relationship, not a submissive one.

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Question: Does true loyalty require unconditional support? Why or why not?

I think true loyalty doesn\'t mean unconditional and unquestioning support.

>> CORRECT!

True loyalty is the mind that hope the those we are loyal to could go to the right way and act the right thing.

>> True loyalty is the mindset where we hope that our loyalty to other people could go to the right way and that they would do the right thing.
If we won\'t be critical to those we are loyal to, they will do whatever they want, and they could do something wrong in the end. 

>> CORRECT!
Maybe they won\'t do something wrong.

>> CORRECT!
Nevertheless, we must be critical of those, since there is a possibility that they would change their mind to wrong way due to bad influence outside.

>> Nevertheless, we must be critical of those, since there is a possibility that they would change their mind in a wrong way due to a bad influence outside.

So, if we love them, we have to be critical from an objective standpoint.

>> CORRECT!

If an organization do illegal thing, the member should speak up their voice.

>> If an organization does an illegal thing, the members should speak up.

OR >> If an organization does an illegal thing, the members should let their voices be heard.

If an individual is willing to do bad thing, people who are loyal to him/her should make them stop it.

>> If an individual is willing to do a bad thing, people who are loyal to him/her should make him/her stop.
True loyalty leads those we are loyal to to the right way.

>> True loyalty leads those who are loyal to to the right way.

They should be a complementary relationship, not a submissive one.

>> CORRECT!

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