homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
I can feel how passionate you are about this healthcare device.
You have also talked about it in class.
I hope someday you\'ll be able to make it real! ^^
~~t. Ally
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i would invent health care device.
>> I would invent a healthcare device.
because it is very important that healthcare.
>> Because healthcare is very important.
so many people increase long life also health skill is step by step increase
>> So many people\'s life expectancy will be increased step by step.
i thank, healthcare device will makes earning money.
>> I also think that this healthcare device will help me earn a lot of money.
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