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Hello Jin Young. Thanks once again for this. Very well said. I would have to agree that spending money you worked hard for is more worth it. You would even think of spending it wisely because you have worked hard and you know how difficult it was to earn it.
- T. Beth
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If this situation come to me, I think I write proper money that is enough for me to do business.
>>>> If this situation comes to me, I think I would write the proper amount of money that is enough for me to do business.
I don\'t want to make a name for myself as success because of others\' support.
>>>> I don\'t want to make a name for myself as a successful person because of others\' support.
So, even if I have a such incredible opportunity, I will not demand a lot of money.
>>>> So even if I have such an incredible opportunity, I will not demand for a lot of money.
I seem to feel money is mine only after I prepare for business and earn money according to business success.
>>>> I seem to feel the money is mine only after I prepare for business and earn money from its success.
These days, I feel that something for elder people to say are almost right, among which \"it is not mine to earn money through no effort\" is inspired to me mostly.
>>>> These days, I feel that what most elder people say are almost right. Among which is \"it is not mine to earn money through no effort.\" This has inspired me greatly.
Without effort, I will be scared on money to earn fortunately and can\'t spend money as my way.
>>>> Without effort, I will be scared with the money just given to me and I wouldn\'t be able to spend it freely as I want to.
But, in adverse case that I earn money sincerely, I spend money as my way without concern that this money is not mine.
>>>> On the other hand, if I have earned the money sincerely, I will spend it the way I want to without concern that this money is not mine.
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