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Hi Irene!
I drank with my friend last night then when I woke up I felt little fever in my body. ooh~~ I have to take a rest not to catch a cold.
By the way, are you really going to go to US?
ESSAY: Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. Some examples are cockfighting and dog fighting and some forms of hunting and fishing. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.
I absolutely agree with that all blood sports should be banned specially using animal fightings.
Animal fightins are so brutal and savage. some animals are bred to be used in fightings and most of them die when they fight. I feel so sad for them and I get anglry with people enjoying animal fighting.
I want to order to those people, ' go up the fight ring and fight by yourself.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! ^_^ You had a bad hangover dear. I think that cold was cause by the micro dust that is contaminating your air in Korea. As for your question regarding me going to the US, I did apply. But it will take a long time to process everything. I was told that it will take 4 years. That is too long, don\'t you think? ^_^
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene!
I drank with my friend last night then when I woke up I felt little fever in my body. ooh~~
>>> I drank with my friend last night then when I woke up I felt a little feverish. ooh~~
>>> I drank with my friend last night then when I woke up I felt warm all over. ooh~~
I have to take a rest not to catch a cold.
>>> I\'m supposed to be taking a rest not catching a cold.
By the way, are you really going to go to US?
>>> By the way, are you really going to go to the US?
ESSAY: Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. Some examples are cockfighting and dog fighting and some forms of hunting and fishing. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.
I absolutely agree with that all blood sports should be banned specially using animal fightings.
>>> I absolutely agree that all blood sports should be banned specially the use of animals as fighters.
Animal fightings are so brutal and savage.
>>> Correct.
Some animals are bred to be used in fightings and most of them die when they fight.
>>> Correct.
>>> Some animals are bred to fight and most of them die during the fight.
I feel so sad for them and I get angry with people enjoying animal fighting.
>>> I feel so sad for them and I get angry with those people who enjoy watching animal fights.
I want to order to those people, \' go up the fight ring and fight by yourself.
>>> I want to order those people to get in the ring and fight amongst themselves.
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene!
I drank with my friend last night then when I woke up I felt little fever in my body. ooh~~
>>> I drank with my friend last night then when I woke up I felt a little feverish. ooh~~
>>> I drank with my friend last night then when I woke up I felt warm all over. ooh~~
I have to take a rest not to catch a cold.
>>> I\'m supposed to be taking a rest not catching a cold.
By the way, are you really going to go to US?
>>> By the way, are you really going to go to the US?
ESSAY: Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. Some examples are cockfighting and dog fighting and some forms of hunting and fishing. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.
I absolutely agree with that all blood sports should be banned specially using animal fightings.
>>> I absolutely agree that all blood sports should be banned specially the use of animals as fighters.
Animal fightings are so brutal and savage.
>>> Correct.
Some animals are bred to be used in fightings and most of them die when they fight.
>>> Correct.
>>> Some animals are bred to fight and most of them die during the fight.
I feel so sad for them and I get angry with people enjoying animal fighting.
>>> I feel so sad for them and I get angry with those people who enjoy watching animal fights.
I want to order to those people, \' go up the fight ring and fight by yourself.
>>> I want to order those people to get in the ring and fight amongst themselves.
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