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2018-11-08 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> Why is it better to invest money instead of saving it in the bank? When depositing money, interest is not high and only similar with inflation rate. So, we invest money using other ways inevitably such as property or stock. Of course, these invest product have a risk that people can lose their money. But, I'm inclined to endure risks in order to get more money, rather than getting small profits while investing safe product. However, we have to be careful on thoughtless investment. For example, after hearing other people's investment suggestion, investing according to it without research on these suggestion should not arise. Although listening the way to invest from others, we should make sure whether it is wrong or right information through searching internet.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. Investing is really risky. Some say it is like gambling. But if you get lucky, it\'s a great thing! Being knowledgeable about it is really important.

- T. Beth

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When depositing money, interest is not high and only similar with inflation rate.

>>>  When depositing money in the bank, the interest is not high and is only similar with inflation rate.   

So, we invest money using other ways inevitably such as property or stock.

>>>  CORRECT.

>>>  OR:  So, we  inevitably invest money in other ways such as property or stock.

Of course, these invest product have a risk that people can lose their money.

>>>  Of course, there is a risk of losing money in these investments.  

But, I\'m inclined to endure risks in order to get more money, rather than getting small profits while investing safe product.

>>>  But, I\'m inclined to endure risks in order to get more money rather than getting small profits on safe investments.   

However, we have to be careful on thoughtless investment.

>>>  CORRECT.  

For example, after hearing other people\'s investment suggestion, investing according to it without research on these suggestion should not arise.

>>> For example, after hearing other people\'s investment suggestion, investing on it without further research is not a good idea.    

Although listening the way to invest from others, we should make sure whether it is wrong or right information through searching internet.

>>>  Although we listen to others\' suggestions on ways to invest, we should make sure whether it is right or wrong by searching the internet.  


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