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2018-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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The question: What I would say to myself younger. What you had experience in student government would have a great impact on your job-career future, which is your valuable asset. I suggest you need more open-minded state to come to people you meet first and focus on pragmatic knowledge to read the flow of economy or political matters. You are already doing great now, but make sure your direction to go further more sharply and precisely.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

This is a very inspiring composition.

Such a nice encouragement to your younger self.

Thank you for sharing this with me. ^^

~~t. Ally

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What you had experience in student government would have a great impact on your job-career future, which is your valuable asset.

>> What you had experienced in student government would have a great impact on your job and career in the future. It is your most valuable asset.

I suggest you need more open-minded state to come to people you meet first and focus on pragmatic knowledge to read the flow of economy or political matters.

>> I suggest you need to be more in a more open-minded state when it comes to the people you meet for the first time and focus on pragmatic knowledge to be able to read the flow of the economy or political matters.

You are already doing great now, but make sure your direction to go further more sharply and precisely.

>> You are already doing great now, but make sure of your direction to go farther at a more sharp and precise manner.

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