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2018-11-12 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> Why do you think it is necessary to relieve stress? When confronting worries, I'm usually captured in this and can't do anything because of stress. So in my case I have to solve my stress immediately in order to process my work. For these reasons, I think I usually use the method that is extreme. For example, it includes what eat a lot of sweet somethings such as chocolates and snacks until I vomit these. When I get stressed, I can't seem to feel that I'm full, leading me to eat endlessly. Of course, I know it is very bad habit on my health, but I can't find the method that replace it. I want to know how to solve the stress while guarding my health. If I find solution regarding stress, I can solve my stress more efficiently and do my work comfortably.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. I agree with you. I think a healthy way to relieve stress is better because you wouldn\'t feel guilty after. I did stress eating a lot before too. That\'s why I\'ve always been over weight. So recently, I decided to live healthier. I try to avoid sweets these days. I know I have to. You\'re okay. I mean, you don\'t have problems with being over weight so I guess you can just go ahead and eat whatever you want. Good for you! Haha.

- T. Beth

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When confronting worries, I\'m usually captured in this and can\'t do anything because of stress.

>>>>  CORRECT.

>>>> OR: When face with worries, I\'m usually caught up in it and can\'t even do anything because of stress.   

So in my case, I have to solve my stress immediately in order to process my work.

>>>>  CORRECT.

>>>> OR: So in my case, I have to resolve my stress immediately in order to proceed with my work.   

For these reasons, I think I usually use the method that is extreme.

>>>> For that reason, I usually use extreme measures/methods.    

For example, it includes what eat a lot of sweet somethings such as chocolates and snacks until I vomit these.

>>>> For example, I eat a lot of sweets like chocolate and snacks until I feel like vomiting.    

When I get stressed, I can\'t seem to feel that I\'m full, leading me to eat endlessly.

>>>>  CORRECT.

>>>> OR: When I get stressed, I can\'t seem to feel full which leads me to eat endlessly.    

Of course, I know it is very bad habit on my health, but I can\'t find the method that replace it.

>>>> Of course, I know it is a very unhealthy habit, but I can\'t find other methods to replace it.     

I want to know how to solve the stress while guarding my health.

>>>> CORRECT.

>>>> OR: I want to know how to relieve stress in a  healthy way.    

If I find solution regarding stress, I can solve my stress more efficiently and do my work comfortably.

>>>>  If I find a solution for stress, I can solve my stress more efficiently and do my work comfortably.   

 

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