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Hello Jin Young. Thank you once again for this. I agree, we are the sailor of our own boat. It depends on us if we would consider other people\'s opinion as a motivation to be better or not. I hope you consider negative opinions as constructive criticisms.
- T. Beth
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In the field in which I\'m insufficient, I usually care other people\'s opinion in order to fill my insufficient knowledge and follow rivals rapidly.
>>> In the field in which I\'m insufficient, I usually care about other people\'s opinion in order to fill my insufficient knowledge and keep up with rivals rapidly.
>>> OR: In the field which I\'m insufficient in, I usually care about other people\'s opinion in order to improve myself and keep up with rivals rapidly.
Their opinions come from their experiences, so it help me not failed by avoiding ways same with their one.
>>> Their opinion come from their experiences, so it would help me not to fail by avoiding their mistakes.
Therefore, I can save my time by eradicating failure methods and contemplate other effective ones.
>>> Therefore, I can save my time by eradicating failure methods and contemplate on other effective ones.
However, what there are many opinion could make problems also.
>>> However, if there are too many opinions it could cause problems also.
In Chinese lore, there is a sentence \"If there are many boatman in a ship, it go to a mountain\".
>>> In Chinese lore, there is a sentence that says \"If there are many boatman in a ship, it goes to a mountain\".
Thus, although I listen to many opinion which can help my life, decisions have to be made by me and I must bear own responsibility on decision.
>>> Thus, although I listen to many opinion which can help my life, I have to take responsibility for making a decision.
In other words, although it is good thing to listen to other opinions, final decisions were made by me.
>>> In other words, although it is a good thing to listen to other opinions, the final decisions will be on me.
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