homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Irene!
Aren't you tired ? You get up so early in the morning as I know.
You must need sweet things to make you cheer up around this time.
I hope you have a nice tea time with sweet macaroons and chocolate cakes with your friend later. Oh yummy!
Have fun!
ESSAY: What do you fear the most? Why?
What I fear the most is losing my loved ones.
Certainly, I also fear for illness, poverty and disasters as everyone does.
But When I imagine losing my husband or my puppy Nana, tears come out in my eyes.
Sometimes, I ignore my loved ones, specially family and take it for granted in the reason of they are always next me without any asking.
As I am getting older and more mature, I think about death frequently and realize how they are valuable in my life.
I try to love as much as I can and express how much I love them frankly.
Let's love more them the next you and treat them more kindly!
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! ^_^ Wow! I like your suggestions! Yummy|! I love sweet treats too. I have a sweet tooth. We are actually going to a Korean buffet restaurant. It\'s her treat. hihihi.
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene!
Aren\'t you tired ?
>>> Correct.
You get up so early in the morning as I know.
>>> Correct.
>>> I know you have to get up so early in the morning.
You must need sweet things to make you cheer up around this time.
>>> You must take sweet treats to cheer you up around this time.
I hope you have a nice tea time with sweet macaroons and chocolate cakes with your friend later. Oh yummy!
>>> Correct.
Have fun!
>>> Correct.
ESSAY: What do you fear the most? Why?
What I fear the most is losing my loved ones.
>>> Correct.
Certainly, I also fear for illness, poverty and disasters as everyone does.
>>> Certainly, I also fear falling ill, poverty and all kinds of disasters as everyone does.
But When I imagine losing my husband or my puppy Nana, tears come out in my eyes.
>>> But when I imagine losing my husband or my puppy Nana, tears come out from my eyes.
Sometimes, I ignore my loved ones, specially family and take it for granted in the reason of they are always next me without any asking.
>>> Sometimes, I ignore my loved ones, specially family and take them for granted for the reason that they are always around me.
As I am getting older and more mature, I think about death frequently and realize how they are valuable in my life.
>>> As I am getting older and more mature, I now think about death frequently and come to realize how they are valuable in my life.
I try to love as much as I can and express how much I love them frankly.
>>> I try to love them as much as I can and express it openly.
Let\'s love more them the next you and treat them more kindly!
>>> Let\'s love those around us and treat them more kindly!
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene!
Aren\'t you tired ?
>>> Correct.
You get up so early in the morning as I know.
>>> Correct.
>>> I know you have to get up so early in the morning.
You must need sweet things to make you cheer up around this time.
>>> You must take sweet treats to cheer you up around this time.
I hope you have a nice tea time with sweet macaroons and chocolate cakes with your friend later. Oh yummy!
>>> Correct.
Have fun!
>>> Correct.
ESSAY: What do you fear the most? Why?
What I fear the most is losing my loved ones.
>>> Correct.
Certainly, I also fear for illness, poverty and disasters as everyone does.
>>> Certainly, I also fear falling ill, poverty and all kinds of disasters as everyone does.
But When I imagine losing my husband or my puppy Nana, tears come out in my eyes.
>>> But when I imagine losing my husband or my puppy Nana, tears come out from my eyes.
Sometimes, I ignore my loved ones, specially family and take it for granted in the reason of they are always next me without any asking.
>>> Sometimes, I ignore my loved ones, specially family and take them for granted for the reason that they are always around me.
As I am getting older and more mature, I think about death frequently and realize how they are valuable in my life.
>>> As I am getting older and more mature, I now think about death frequently and come to realize how they are valuable in my life.
I try to love as much as I can and express how much I love them frankly.
>>> I try to love them as much as I can and express it openly.
Let\'s love more them the next you and treat them more kindly!
>>> Let\'s love those around us and treat them more kindly!
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