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I think traveling is very good for various experience of life.
>> I think travelling is very good to gain a lot of life experiences.
When I visited to USA I realized that world is big!

>> When I visited the USA, I realized that the world is big.

There are many people who are different of national and a lot of constructions like Empire state building.
>> There were many people from different nations and a lot of products of architecture like the Empire State Building.
That was good experience for me.
>> That was a good experience for me.
And I like eatting~

>> I also like to eat a lot when I travel.

Last summer I wnt to Vietnam for a vacation.

>> I went to Vietnam last summer for a vacation.
There are many famous foods.

>> There were many popular dishes.

I love it.

>> I loved it.