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2018-11-15 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> How do you express disagreement with other people's opinion without sounding offensive? In Samsung electric company, there is a legendary man named "gwon ohyeon" who started from a lowest position and reached to a vice-president finally. He published his biography few months ago, which has a title "hyper-gap". Through this book, he say hyper-gap strategy mean that the first group make a very big chasm for the second one, so second one can't think that it is possible to keep up with the first one. Also, he explain how to climb toward vice-president in this book. Although his position was higher than other, he listen to other employees' opinions sincerely, and when he felt dissatisfaction on other opinions, he informed his idea politely, acknowledged other opinion, and tried to convince others toward his opinion.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. There are really so much we can learn from self-made individuals.

- T. Beth

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In Samsung electric company, there is a legendary man named \"gwon ohyeon\" who started from a lowest position and reached to a vice-president finally.

>>>> In Samsung electric company, there is a legendary man named Gwon Oh-yeon who started from the lowest position and finally became the vice-president.     

He published his biography few months ago, which has a title \"hyper-gap\".

>>>> He published his biography few months ago, which was entitled \"Hyper-gap\".     

Through this book, he say hyper-gap strategy mean that the first group make a very big chasm for the second one, so second one can\'t think that it is possible to keep up with the first one.

>>>> In his book, he stated that hyper-gap strategy means that the first group makes a very big chasm for the second one, so the second one would think that it is not possible to keep up with the first one.       

Also, he explain how to climb toward vice-president in this book.

>>>> Also, he explained how to climb towards being a vice-president in this book.       

Although his position was higher than other, he listen to other employees\' opinions sincerely, and when he felt dissatisfaction on other opinions, he informed his idea politely, acknowledged other opinion, and tried to convince others toward his opinion.

>>>>  Although his position was higher than others, he listens to other employees\' opinions sincerely and when he felt dissatisfaction about it he relays his idea politely, acknowledged other\'s opinion, and tried to convince others about his opinion.      

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