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2018-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

MY happiness is minor pleasure. In my normal life, I play the soccer, watch the movie , eat a meat , go to sleep , work and buy clothes,this everything is comeback to me as happiness. For that , I think to need money to do this everything. Maybe many money life is not happy, but littel money life is unhappy. So I need to money for my happiness.

강사 첨삭

Hi Seong! Good morning! Are you happy today?

I hope that you always find happiness.

Money is happiness but not all the time.

Some people are not happy even if they have a lot of money.

See you later! ^^

~~May~~

MY happiness is minor pleasure.

>> I feel happy even in small things.
In my normal life, I play the soccer, watch the movie , eat a meat , go to sleep , work and buy clothes,this everything is comeback to me as happiness.
>>
In my normal life, I play soccer, watch movie , eat meat , go to sleep , work and buy clothes. These are my happiness.

For that , I think to need money to do this everything.

>> Because of that, I need money for my happiness.
Maybe many money life is not happy, but littel money life is unhappy.
>> There might have unhappiness in life if you have a lot of money.
 So I need to money for my happiness.

>> But for me money is happiness.

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