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2018-11-19 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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What do you think is the most practical solution to stop using gadgets too much? Actually, I don't think that it is possible to make people to stop using gadgets because people are already familiar with using devices and know how they can make world more convenience. But, if everyone can follow,I think the most practical solution is making rules. It is hard to stop using gadgets, so regulation will be necessary. To prevent someone break the rules, punishment will be needed also. p.s Honestly, my opinion about gadgets is very positive. I don't think it's not bad unless(?) using too much smartphones.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]. ^^

Thank you for sending in a composition.

I agree with you.

Gadgets are only bad if it\'s used too much.

Here are some corrections to your composition. ^^

~~t. Ally

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Actually, I don\'t think that it is possible to make people to stop using gadgets because people are already familiar with using devices and know how they can make world more convenience.

>> Actually, I don\'t think that it is possible to make people stop using gadgets, because people are already familiar with using devices and they know how they can make world more convenient for everyone.

But, if everyone can follow,I think the most practical solution is making rules.

>> But, if everyone can follow, I think the most practical solution is to make some rules.

It is hard to stop using gadgets, so regulation will be necessary.

>> CORRECT!

To prevent someone break the rules, punishment will be needed also.

>> To prevent them from breaking the rules, consequences must also be given to violators.

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