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2018-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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Hi Irene! I was very happy today because you enjoyed listening my stories. As I told you, I have many funny and wired nonfiction stories as many as my age. I will tell you my stories when we have time. See you tomorrow! ESSAY: If you could keep any kind of animal as a pet, what would it be? What would you name it? I have a very beautiful,sweet and smart dog. Her name is Nana. She is one of Dachshund black and brown color. I adopted her 6 years ago, actually I bought her at the Pet Shop. When I decided to adopt a dog, I heard from doctor that I am very difficult to have a baby because of my ovary. one of my ovary can not work, the other is not also healthy. Even I have a baby, my uterus can not hold and sustain a baby for 10 months. I still remember vividly when Nana looked at me at the first time. She was a so tiny and weak puppy in a glass box, Her weight was just 700g.( now more than 5kg) My husband and I believe that she is the treasure and joy of our marrige.

강사 첨삭

Hello again [이름]. I really enjoy listening to your stories. I wanted to tell you a while ago that you seem to have gone through a lot of unfortunate events. I can\'t imagine going through those things. I know that fighting with a burglar is really scary so it was really brave of you to have done that.  Are you okay Ms. [이름]?  You somewhat attract a lot of unfortunate events. ^_^

Oh my gosh!  I want to cry because of your story (regarding not being able to have a baby). Thank you for sharing that painful part of your life. I\'ll pray for your family (that includes Dada). ^_^ May you live a happy life.
~T. IRENE~
Hi Irene!
 I was very happy today because you enjoyed listening my stories.
>>>   I was very happy today because you enjoyed listening to my stories.
As I told you, I have many funny and wired nonfiction stories as many as my age.
>>> As I told you already, I had as many funny and weird non-fiction stories as my age.
I will tell you my stories when we have time.
 See you tomorrow!
>>> I will tell you more of my stories when we have a longer time.
 ESSAY: If you could keep any kind of animal as a pet, what would it be? What would you name it?
 I have a very beautiful, sweet and smart dog.
>>> Correct.
 Her name is Nana.
>>> Correct.
 She is one of Dachshund black and brown color.
>>> She is a Dachshund breed. She has a mix of black and brown coat.
 I adopted her 6 years ago. Actually, I bought her at the Pet Shop.
>>> Correct.
 When I decided to adopt a dog, I heard from doctor that I am very difficult to have a baby because of my ovary.
>>> At that time I decided to adopt a dog, I just heard from doctor that I have  difficulty getting pregnant because of my ovary.
One of my ovary can not work, the other is not also healthy.
>>> One of my ovaries is not functioning well and the other one is also weak. 
Even I have a baby, my uterus can not hold and sustain a baby for 10 months.
>>> Even if I have a baby, my uterus cannot hold and sustain a baby for 10 months.
 I still remember vividly when Nana looked at me at the first time.
>>>  I still remember vividly when Nana looked at me the first time.
 She was a so tiny and weak puppy in a glass box,
>>>  She was a tiny and weak puppy inside a glass box.
 Her weight was just 700g.( now more than 5kg)
>>> Correct.
>>> She weighs just 700g ( now more than 5kg).
 My husband and I believe that she is the treasure and joy of our marrige.
>>> Correct.

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