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Hi Sophie! It\'s just so inspiring to hear some people\'s stories, like you, regarding their volunteer work.
How I wish all people in the world do the same, helping other people who are in need.
I\'ve heard about that accident in the sea in South Korea. It was the MV Sewol. High school students and teachers
were on board. There was also an issue regarding that, involving the government, claiming that the rescue was not enough.
Talk to you later about this ^^
~~May~~
4years ago, i have done Busan international film festival volunteer.
>> Four years ago, I volunteered in Busan International Film Festival.
My team and me took a PR video, and then we met a famous actress, actor, director a lot.
>> My team and I took a PR video and we met a lot of famous actresses, actors, and directors.
And there was a big incident in Korea.
>> There was also a big tragedy happened in Korea.
took a 304 passengers cruise was sinked in sea.
>> 304 passengers were on board in a cruise ship which sank in the sea.
almost students on a school trip.
>> Most of the passenger were students.
Then some peoples shooted documentary about this incident.
>> Some people made a documentary about this tragedy.
Korea government also Busan mayor pused put out of showing on BIFF. But BIFF showing that documentary.
>> The Korean government, also the Busan mayor, pulled the documentary out on BIFF.
But BIFF showing that documentary. And BIFF was cut budget.
>> Still, BIFF still showed the documentary, but their budget was cut.
many movie-man have done boycott to Busan mayor.
>> Many film makers did boycott to the Busan mayor.
Very sad incident to Korea history and i have done volunteer at the worst moment BIFF historically.
>> It was a very sad incident in Korean history and I have done a volunteer work at this worst moment in BIFF.
Also i have done volunteer
Save the childrent, Unicef, and red cross! For child.
>> I also volunteered in Save the Children, UNICEF, and Red Cross.
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