homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Irene
It seems to snow soon.
When I was young, I and my boyfirend planed to meet at the first snowing day, even though we don't know when it will snow.
One day, It snowed, so I went to the place which we promised to meet.
However he didn't show up.
I had to come back home with a big disappointment.
The next day,I found that it snowed just my place.hihi
Have a wonderful day!
ESSAY: Would you or have you ever tried online dating? What do you think are the dangers of online dating?
I have a experience of online dating with a guy when I was 20's.
I met him through the internet chatting room and decided to meet him.
But He was not him who I expected. certainly, he felt the same way.
I exited the chatting room the next day.
I heared that many young people have online dating, therfore accidents occure between them such as rape,fraud and so on.
I think that It is dangerous.
We don't know even if his name is real or fake.
I bet I was a very lucky case.
Forewarned is forearmed.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Wow! What a romantic experience of winter season! It was so sad though that he didn\'t show up. Your story can be made into a movie. ahahaha Maybe it didn\'t snow in his place so he didn\'t know it was snowing that day.
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene
It seems to snow soon.
>>> It seemed to have snowed too soon.
When I was young, I and my boyfirend planned to meet at the first snowing day, even though we don\'t know when it will snow.
>>> When I was young, my boyfriend and I promised to meet in a certain place at the first sign of snow. We didn\'t know when it will happen.
One day, It snowed, so I went to the place which we promised to meet.
>>> One day, it snowed so I went to the place where we promised to meet.
However he didn\'t show up.
>>> Correct.
I had to come back home with a big disappointment.
>>> I came back home very disappointed.
The next day, I found that it snowed just my place.hihi
>>> The next day, I found out that it snowed just around my place. hihi
Have a wonderful day!
>>> Correct.
ESSAY: Would you or have you ever tried online dating? What do you think are the dangers of online dating?
I have a experience of online dating with a guy when I was 20\'s.
>>> I had an experience on online dating with a guy when I was in my 20\'s.
I met him through the internet chatting room and decided to meet him.
>>> I met him through the internet chat room and decided to meet him.
But He was not him who I expected.
>>> But he was not who I expected him to be.
certainly, he felt the same way.
>>> He certainly felt the same way.
I exited the chatting room the next day.
>>> Correct.
I heared that many young people have online dating, therefore accidents occur between them such as rape,fraud and so on.
>>> I heard of many young people joining online dating and being victims of crimes such as rape, fraud and so on.
I think that it is dangerous.
>>> Correct.
>>> I think it is dangerous.
We don\'t know even if his name is real or fake.
>>> We don\'t even know if his name is real or fake or an alias.
I bet I was a very lucky case.
>>> Correct.
>>> I bet I was very lucky.
Forewarned is forearmed.
>>> Correct! ^_^
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene
It seems to snow soon.
>>> It seemed to have snowed too soon.
When I was young, I and my boyfirend planned to meet at the first snowing day, even though we don\'t know when it will snow.
>>> When I was young, my boyfriend and I promised to meet in a certain place at the first sign of snow. We didn\'t know when it will happen.
One day, It snowed, so I went to the place which we promised to meet.
>>> One day, it snowed so I went to the place where we promised to meet.
However he didn\'t show up.
>>> Correct.
I had to come back home with a big disappointment.
>>> I came back home very disappointed.
The next day, I found that it snowed just my place.hihi
>>> The next day, I found out that it snowed just around my place. hihi
Have a wonderful day!
>>> Correct.
ESSAY: Would you or have you ever tried online dating? What do you think are the dangers of online dating?
I have a experience of online dating with a guy when I was 20\'s.
>>> I had an experience on online dating with a guy when I was in my 20\'s.
I met him through the internet chatting room and decided to meet him.
>>> I met him through the internet chat room and decided to meet him.
But He was not him who I expected.
>>> But he was not who I expected him to be.
certainly, he felt the same way.
>>> He certainly felt the same way.
I exited the chatting room the next day.
>>> Correct.
I heared that many young people have online dating, therefore accidents occur between them such as rape,fraud and so on.
>>> I heard of many young people joining online dating and being victims of crimes such as rape, fraud and so on.
I think that it is dangerous.
>>> Correct.
>>> I think it is dangerous.
We don\'t know even if his name is real or fake.
>>> We don\'t even know if his name is real or fake or an alias.
I bet I was a very lucky case.
>>> Correct.
>>> I bet I was very lucky.
Forewarned is forearmed.
>>> Correct! ^_^
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