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2018-11-26 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> Do you think synthetic drug is more effective than oriental medicine? I think synthetic drug is more effective definitely than oriental medicine. Because I heard that honey-water work well when getting a cold, I drunk it last weekends, but its effect was transient and flu wasn't alleviated. When I was a middle school, there is a hospital to which I always go when I got a flu. Surprisingly, after I just took a shot on treating flu, I recovered from getting fever and headache directly. So, that hospital always was crowed by patients and it always had a long time in order to meet a doctor. Oriental medicine is more safe and not uncomfortable on body, but people living these days are very busy and don't have a time that it is wait until body was healed naturally. So, people pretend to like synthetic drug because they don't have enough time.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. I guess you\'re right. People find synthetic drugs more convenient because they want to save time. However, there are still a lot of older people who prefer natural or oriental medicine.

- T. Beth

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I think synthetic drug is more effective definitely than oriental medicine.

>>>   CORRECT.

>>> OR: I think synthetic drug is  definitely more effective than oriental medicine.  

Because I heard that honey-water work well when getting a cold, I drunk it last weekends, but its effect was transient and flu wasn\'t alleviated.

>>> Because I heard that honey-water works well for colds, I drank it last weekend but its effect was transient and the flu wasn\'t alleviated.

>>> OR: I hear that honey-water works well for colds so I drank it last weekend but its effect was temporary and did nothing for my flu.    

When I was a middle school, there is a hospital to which I always go when I got a flu.

>>>  When I was in middle school, there was a hospital where I always went to when I had a flu.   

Surprisingly, after I just took a shot on treating flu, I recovered from getting fever and headache directly.

>>> Surprisingly, after taking a flu shot I instantly recover from fever and headache.    

So, that hospital always was crowed by patients and it always had a long time in order to meet a doctor.

>>> So, that hospital was always crowed by patients and it always took a long time to meet the doctor.     

Oriental medicine is more safe and not uncomfortable on body, but people living these days are very busy and don\'t have a time that it is wait until body was healed naturally.

>>> Oriental medicine is safer and not uncomfortable to the body, but people living these days are very busy and don\'t have time to wait for their body to heal naturally.  

So, people pretend to like synthetic drug because they don\'t have enough time.

>>>   CORRECT.

>>> OR; So people are more likely to prefer synthetic drug because they don\'t have enough time.  


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