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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. This is a social problem in your country, as well as in Japan. Low birth rate in a country could cause major problems in the future. So you should do your country a favor and have a lot of children. :D
- T. Beth
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From national statistic office, anticipation on infant number given birth during the whole woman\'s life was represented that it is not over 1 infant.
>>>> From the National Statistics Office, birth expectancy among women in their whole life is not over than 1 infant.
Population cliff is realized so parliament determine that supporting on giving birth was provided in $2000 and extra pay on children was expanded.
>>>> The population rate has dwindled and this urged the parliament to increase the $2,000 monthly child support provided by the government.
However, it seem to be not easy to decide giving birth through this support.
>>>> However, it doesn\'t seem easy to decide on having children through this support.
First, after October on next year, it is possible to receive $2000 which is average level on postnatal care price.
>>>> First, after October next year, it is possible to receive $2,000 which is average for postnatal care cost.
Extra pay on children is expanded from children under 6 years old to under 9.
>>>> OR: Extra pay on children is expanded for those under 6 years old and those under 9.
But, it seem to be not easy for these policies to increase birth rate.
>>>> But, it doesn\'t seem easy for these policies to increase birth rate.
\"there are not people who want to give birth to children because of this support fund, and almost people hesitate because there are not place entrusting children\"
>>>> \"There are no people who want to give birth to children because of this support fund, and almost people hesitate because there are no places to entrust their children with.\"
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