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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. It\'s so scary when you look at it and try to imagine the possible worst case scenario. We know it is a serious problem but people seem to not think of it seriously. It\'s something most of us take for granted.
- T. Beth
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With time passed, temperature on the whole world would be getting higher, and finally there might be two season like summer and winter in the future.
>>>> As time passes, the temperature in the whole world would go higher. Eventually, there might be just two seasons like summer and winter in the future.
I heard island nation like Japan can be disappeared by increasing ocean\'s level because higher temperature are melting ice in the North Pole.
>>>> I heard island nations like Japan could disappear because of the increasing level of water caused by melting ice in the North Pole.
Also, Netherlands where 1/6 of land is under ocean\'s level would have a critical situation.
>>>> Also, Netherlands where 1/6 land is below sea level would be in a critical situation.
So, if temperature is getting higher, season will be two and some nations encounter the worst situation, which can induce the third world war between island nation and continent\'s nation.
>>>> Therefore, if the temperature is getting higher, there will be only two seasons and some nations will be in its worst situation which could induce world war between nations.
I think renewable energy is the one of the methods which can solve this global warming.
>>>> I think renewable energy is one of the methods that can solve this global warming.
Also,if nuclear fusion power plants were built, there would not be concerned about getting higher in temperature.
>>>> Also, if nuclear fusion power plants were built, there wouldn\'t be any concern about the increasing temperature.
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