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2018-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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What's your most valued possession? My most valued possession is sell Phone because I can call anyone and if I bored I can play games. Also I always brings the rubix cube. In school's reces or lunch time, I solve cubes with my friends. I have 4 cubes in my home. It is my birthday soon. So I would like to get my birthday present Iphone or Mix up cube.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

Thank you for doing your homework ^^

I hope you are having a great night.

See you tomorrow ☺


My most valued possession is sell Phone because I can call anyone and if I bored I can play games.

>> One of my most valued possessions is my cellphone because I can call if I\'m bored and I can use it for playing games.


Also I always brings the rubix cube.

>> Also, I always bring my Rubik\'s cube. 


In school\'s reces or lunch time, I solve cubes with my friends.

>> I solve it with my friends during recess or at lunch time.


I have 4 cubes in my home.

>> I have 4 Rubik\'s cubes at home.


It is my birthday soon.

>> My birthday is coming up soon.


So I would like to get my birthday present Iphone or Mix up cube.

>> So, I would like to have an iPhone or a mix up cube as my present.

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