homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Irene!
After lunch, I took a walk with my puppy Nana, I came close to freezing.
Nana always wants to go out as long as possible. but she turned to the office after 10 minutes walking. She must be cold too.hihi
ESSAY: What is your biggest/weirdest fear?
I fear death,illness, disasters and poverty as everyone does.
If i have to tell my wired fear. I'll say I fear of snakes and fog.
I fear and don't lke snakes.
Long body, slow moving, and creepy cold skin make me more than fear. Even,I don't want to say the world 'snake'
When I dream of sankes, I feel terrible all day and I cannot help frearing of something might happen to me.
I fear of fog specially, heavy foggy day.
It also makes me goose bumps.
Long time ago, It was a very foggy day,
I was on my way to go to work by my car.
I could not see anyting even 1 meter in front of my car.
Although I turned on the high beam, It didn't show my way to drive.
I was so scared eunough to be mad, After that time, I fear of fog.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]. ^_^ You seem to be very close with your Nana. ^_^ I also ahve 4 dogs at home. One English bulldog, 2 chihuahuas and a Shih Tzu. The Shih is the oldest. He is the leader of the pack although the bulldog just ignores him. Ha ha ha.
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene!
After lunch, I took a walk with my puppy Nana. I came close to freezing.
>>> Correct.
Nana always wants to go out as long as possible.
>>> Nana always wants stay outside for long as possible.
but she turned to the office after 10 minutes walking.
>>> But she came back in the office after just 10 minutes.
She must be cold too.hihi
>>> She must have felt cold too.
ESSAY: What is your biggest/weirdest fear?
I fear death, illness, disasters and poverty as everyone does.
>>> Correct.
If i have to tell my wired fear. I\'ll say I fear of snakes and fog.
>>> If I have to think of my weirdest fear, I would say snakes and fogs.
I fear and don\'t like snakes.
>>> Correct.
Long body, slow moving, and creepy cold skin make me more than fear.
>>> The snake\'s long cold body and slow movement sends a creepy feeling.
Even, I don\'t want to say the world \'snake\'
>>> I even don\'t wish to mention the word \'snake\'.
When I dream of sankes, I feel terrible all day and I cannot help frearing of something might happen to me.
>>> Whenever I dream of snakes, I would feel terrible the whole day through and would anticipate something bad might happen to me.
I fear of fog specially, heavy foggy day.
>>> I also fear a very foggy day.
It also makes me goose bumps.
>>> It gives me goose bumps.
Long time ago, It was a very foggy day, I was on my way to go to work by my car.
>>> A long time ago, there was one very foggy day and I was on my way to work.
I could not see anyting even 1 meter in front of my car.
>>> It was so dense that I couldn\'t see a meter in front of my car.
Although I turned on the high beam, It didn\'t show my way to drive.
>>> I even turned on the high beam (fog) light but it didn\'t clear my way.
I was so scared eunough to be mad, After that time, I fear of fog.
>>> I got crazy scared. I nearly went mad. So after that, I started fearing fogs.
~T. Irene~
Hi Irene!
After lunch, I took a walk with my puppy Nana. I came close to freezing.
>>> Correct.
Nana always wants to go out as long as possible.
>>> Nana always wants stay outside for long as possible.
but she turned to the office after 10 minutes walking.
>>> But she came back in the office after just 10 minutes.
She must be cold too.hihi
>>> She must have felt cold too.
ESSAY: What is your biggest/weirdest fear?
I fear death, illness, disasters and poverty as everyone does.
>>> Correct.
If i have to tell my wired fear. I\'ll say I fear of snakes and fog.
>>> If I have to think of my weirdest fear, I would say snakes and fogs.
I fear and don\'t like snakes.
>>> Correct.
Long body, slow moving, and creepy cold skin make me more than fear.
>>> The snake\'s long cold body and slow movement sends a creepy feeling.
Even, I don\'t want to say the world \'snake\'
>>> I even don\'t wish to mention the word \'snake\'.
When I dream of sankes, I feel terrible all day and I cannot help frearing of something might happen to me.
>>> Whenever I dream of snakes, I would feel terrible the whole day through and would anticipate something bad might happen to me.
I fear of fog specially, heavy foggy day.
>>> I also fear a very foggy day.
It also makes me goose bumps.
>>> It gives me goose bumps.
Long time ago, It was a very foggy day, I was on my way to go to work by my car.
>>> A long time ago, there was one very foggy day and I was on my way to work.
I could not see anyting even 1 meter in front of my car.
>>> It was so dense that I couldn\'t see a meter in front of my car.
Although I turned on the high beam, It didn\'t show my way to drive.
>>> I even turned on the high beam (fog) light but it didn\'t clear my way.
I was so scared eunough to be mad, After that time, I fear of fog.
>>> I got crazy scared. I nearly went mad. So after that, I started fearing fogs.
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