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2018-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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If you could write a book, what would it be about? Give it a title. If I could write a book, it would be about the future world. Sometimes I imagine more developed world such as everyone can travel to other planets or there are medicines that treatable about every diseases etc. I think it would be great, but there will be many problems also. So, I want to write about a story about someone's overcoming those hardship and the title will be simply 'The Future.' (I know it's a really hackneyed..;()

강사 첨삭

That would be pretty cool, [이름]!

I wish our world could actually reach that level of development. ^^

The world would be a lot better if people could cure all diseases.

~~t. Ally

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If I could write a book, it would be about the future world.

>> CORRECT!

Sometimes I imagine more developed world such as everyone can travel to other planets or there are medicines that treatable about every diseases etc.

>> Sometimes I imagine a more developed world wherein everyone can travel to other planets or where medicines are available to treat all known diseases, etc.

I think it would be great, but there will be many problems also.

>> As great as it could be, it may also cause some problems.

So, I want to write about a story about someone\'s overcoming those hardship and the title will be simply \'The Future.\'

>> So, I want to write a story about someone and how they overcome the hardships of having a developed world. The title will simply be \"The Future\".

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