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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this one. Good point! I think focusing on employees\' health and well-being would greatly benefit the company because it would make them more productive at work.

- T. Beth

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I think suffering sleeping disorder has became proud among people in Korea.

>>>  I think suffering from sleeping disorder has became common among people in Korea.  

Working until late night has became natural and if not doing like that, employees can\'t survive in their company.

>>> Working until late night has become natural and if not doing like that, employees can\'t survive in their company.  

>>> OR: Working until late night has become natural and if they don\'t do that, employees can\'t survive in their company.  

So, almost Koreans have had sleeping disorder in order to survive in intense competition.

>>> So, almost all Koreans have had sleeping disorder in order to survive in an intense competition.  

However, I think these culture bring adverse effect rather than good effect.

>>> OR: However, I think this part of the culture brings adverse effects rather than good effects.    

People can make creative thinking and rational decision making with enough sleep.

>>> CORRECT.  

Also, fast decision help work processed immediately and employee save time.

>>> OR: Also, fast decisions help work be processed immediately and employees can save time.  

Therefore, company must solve sleeping disorder suffered with employees for growth of company.

>>>  Therefore, companies must solve sleeping disorders suffered by employees for the growth of the company.