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Hi there [이름]!

I am happy to hear that despite the issues that your past school put you through, you came back up! ^^

Keep up the perseverance and one day you\'ll be very successful.

~~t. Ally

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I think my biggest life changing moment was this february when I got certificate of my university.

>> I think my biggest life changing moment happened last February, when I got my certificate from my university.

 For 2 years, I studied hard to get good outcome for the school transfer exam.

>> For 2 years, I studied hard to get a good outcome for the school transfer exam.

 I wanted to change my school because my previous school disbanded my major.

>> CORRECT!

 I felt many feelings such as betrayed, sadness. impotence because I feel I become a tool for get money.

>> I felt many feelings such as, betrayal, sadness and I also felt like I was used as a tool to get more money.

 (In Korea, many university closed and unified a lot of majors for the government\'s support policy.)

>> In Korea, many universities closed and unified a lot of majors for the government\'s support policy.

 So I decided to quit that school, and prepared the exam.

>> So I decided to quit that school and prepared for the exam instead.

 I applied 13 universities, finally I got 8 certificates and I chose my university.

>>I applied to 13 universities and I got in to 8 of them. I chose my current university from those 8 options.

 Actually it is not my best wannabe school, but I\'m sure that it is one of my goals.
I spent really hard time.

>> Actually, it is not the top school I wanted to get in to, but I\'m sure that it is one of my goals.

 I went to my acadamy until 6:30am, came back home at 12am and I slept less than 5 hours everyday even on weekend.

>> I go to my academy at 6:30 am and come back home at 12 midnight. I would sleep less than 5 hours every day, even on weekends.

 Now I satisfy my school life and I feel I can do anything because I learned efforts never betray me.

>> Now I am satisfied with my school life and I feel like I can do anything because I have learned that my efforts of getting to my goal will never betray me.