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2018-12-24 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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What are the things that money can't buy? There are many things that money can't buy. I think the biggest things are emotions and time. Those things are important for human life and I think it should not change. I saw a movie "The time" and it is about the world that people use time as money. If it is real world, I cannot live in the fear when I get poor I wil not able to avoid death.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!


Thank you for sending me this composition. ^^

Wow, that analogy of using time as payment for things instead of money is quite a good concept!

Wouldn\'t it be nice to have that in reality?



~~t. Ally


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There are many things that money can\'t buy.

>> CORRECT!


 I think the biggest things are emotions and time.

>> CORRECT!


 Those things are important for human life and I think it should not change.

>> These things are important for humans and I think it should never change.


 I saw a movie \"The time\" and it is about the world that people use time as money.

>> I saw a movie entitled \"The Time\" and it\'s about a world where people use time as money.


 If it is real world, I cannot live in the fear when I get poor I wil not able to avoid death.

>> If it was true in the real world, I would never have to live with the fear of becoming poor and I dying.

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