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Hi [이름]!
Thank you for sending me this composition. ^^
Wow, that analogy of using time as payment for things instead of money is quite a good concept!
Wouldn\'t it be nice to have that in reality?
~~t. Ally
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There are many things that money can\'t buy.
>> CORRECT!
I think the biggest things are emotions and time.
>> CORRECT!
Those things are important for human life and I think it should not change.
>> These things are important for humans and I think it should never change.
I saw a movie \"The time\" and it is about the world that people use time as money.
>> I saw a movie entitled \"The Time\" and it\'s about a world where people use time as money.
If it is real world, I cannot live in the fear when I get poor I wil not able to avoid death.
>> If it was true in the real world, I would never have to live with the fear of becoming poor and I dying.
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