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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. Light exercises can go a long way. Walking, for example, can be very helpful.
- T. Beth
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I think people already know importance of exercise but they can\'t have time for exercise due to having no time to spare.
>>> I think people already know the importance of exercise but they don\'t exercise due to having no time to spare.
It is also same to me.
>>> It is the same for me.
I really want to exercise everyday, but if I exercise, it not only need to take a lot of time but also affect working next day due to tiring body.
>>> I really want to exercise everyday, but if I exercise, it would not only need to take a lot of time but also affects working the next day due to tiredness.
In order to solve these problems, I think we try to exercise in ordinary activity.
>>> OR: In order to solve these problems, I think we try to exercise doing ordinary activities.
>>> OR: In order to solve these problems, I think we try to exercise doing usual activities.
For example, slight exercise can be done in short time during working.
>>> CORRECT.
>>> OR: For example, light exercises can be done in a short time while working.
Especially, clerical worker have to exercise while focusing on lower body because blood lean to lower by sitting on chair all day.
>>> OR: Especially, clerical workers have to exercise while focusing on their lower body because blood circulation on the lower body is poor when sitting on chair all day.
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