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~~ Teacher Sharon

I have purpose to learn English.

>> I have a purpose in learning English. 
First of all, it is that I advance working on promotion.

>> First of all, English would help me in working for a promotion. 
and Second, I have a really dream that I private a exhibition in the future.

>> Second, I have a dream to have a private exhibition in the future.
So It need English interview.

>> That\'s why I need to pass an English interview.
Last, I had a son, I want to show him wonderful way to speak English and Korea even if it takes ten years.

>>  Lastly, I want to show my son that it\'s wonderful to speak in English in Korea even if it takes ten years to learn.