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2019-01-31 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Many people buy the lotto with expectation that they will get much money. I think it is a good way to relieve their stress and also it can be the power to live. You know, there must be the one who get the money from the lotto and I can be the one. If I am picked as winner of lotto, I will be able to do whatever I\'ve want to do like buying my favorite car, travelling to somewhere, and so on. In addition, it will change my lifestyle. Actually, I have never thought about being a winner of lotto, so it is difficult to think what I will do. But, of course, I won\'t use this money only for myself. I\'ve heard that \" It is not only you that have made current you. You can be staying your current position because of many people, even though you don\'t know them\". I need to remember this statement in my heart, and I will keep it in my ways.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

Your chance to win the lottery is very slim but if you do, share it with me. hahaha....

~Lynn   

Many people buy the lotto with expectation that they will get much money.

>> correct!

I think it is a good way to relieve their stress and also it can be the power to live.

>> I think it is a good way to relieve their stress and also it can give them the power to live.

You know, there must be the one who get the money from the lotto and I can be the one.

>> You know, there must be someone who gets the money from the lotto and I can be the one.  

OR>> Someone can get lucky and win from the lottery and that someone could be me.

If I am picked as winner of lotto, I will be able to do whatever I\'ve want to do like buying my favorite car, travelling to somewhere, and so on.

>> If I\'ll win the lotto, I will be able to do whatever I want to do like buying my favorite car, travelling to somewhere, and so on.

In addition, it will change my lifestyle.

>> correct!

Actually, I have never thought about being a winner of lotto, so it is difficult to think what I will do.

>> correct!

But, of course, I won\'t use this money only for myself.

>> correct!

 I\'ve heard that It is not only you that have made the current you.

>> correct!

You can be staying your current position because of many people, even though you don\'t know them\".

>> You can be staying in your current position because of many people, even though you don\'t know them\".

I need to remember this statement in my heart, and I will keep it in my ways.

>> correct!

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