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2019-02-12 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Do you think climate change can be stopped or prevented? What should be done? If we had lived like an animal, we wouldn\'t have worried about climate change.. would we? But it is impossible, at least, for me. I can\'t live like an animal. I have to take a shower everyday and I can\'t become naked. Especially I don\'t want to eat raw meats or sashimi. I can\'t imagine that I go to work without my car.(It is too far to go to work by foot.) Maybe most people think as I do. Then What can we do for the nature? What do we have to do for preventing climate change? I think we need to develop eco-friendly products, machines, buildings, clothes, something like that. It isn\'t the correct answer to stop developing technologies. We can create more eco-friendly things and technologies whhich help to recover our environment. By this way, we will be able to prevent climate chage. I am really sorry that my homework is so late. I hope that I can adapt myself quickly to my new work~! Good night~

강사 첨삭

Hello KC,

I am really grateful having you as my student. You are determined to learn and improve your Emglish.

Continue that passion because it can help you be successful.

Nice job on our homework today!!!

T. Jeny




Do you think climate change can be stopped or prevented? What should be done?

>>correct
 If we had lived like an animal, we wouldn\'t have worried about climate change.. would we?

>> If we had lived like an animal, we wouldn\'t have to worry about climate change, Would we?

But it is impossible, at least, for me.

>>But it is impossible for me.
I can\'t live like an animal.

>>correct

I have to take a shower everyday and I can\'t become naked.

>>I have to take a shower every day and I don\'t want to be naked.

Especially I don\'t want to eat raw meats or sashimi.

>>Especially, I don\'t want to eat raw meat or sashimi.

 I can\'t imagine that I go to work without my car.(It is too far to go to work by foot.) 

 >>I can\'t imagine myself going to work without my car. (It is too far to go to work on foot.) 
 Maybe most people think as I do.

>> Maybe most people think the same way as me.

Then What can we do for nature?

>>correct

What do we have to do for preventing climate change?

>>correct
 I think we need to develop eco-friendly products, machines, buildings, clothes, something like that.

>>correct
 It isn\'t the correct answer to stop developing technologies.

>>correct
We can create more eco-friendly things and technologies which help to recover our environment.

>>We can create more eco-friendly things and technologies which can help recover our environment.
 By this way, we will be able to prevent climate change.

>correct
 I am really sorry that my homework is so late. 

>correct

 I hope that I can adapt myself quickly to my new work~!

>correct
 Good night~

>>correct

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