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Hello Jin Young! Thank you for this. Sometimes e also put sentimental value on things that are given to us by other people. We cherish the person so we value what they have given.
- T. Beth
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People usually try to find value on things through external side.
>>> OR: People usually try to find value on things through the external side.
But, real value is in internal side not external so people must try to find internal value in oneself or others.
>>> But, real value is internal not external so people must try to find internal value in oneself or others.
While related with this, I think people have started to give meanings to things.
>>> Because of this, I think people have started to give meanings to things.
Since people were arose, putting important meaning on things has been continued with history.
>>> Since people existed, putting important meaning on things had been continued all throughout history.
People always want to lean to somethings transcendent in order to get confidence and relief.
>>>People always want to lean to something transcendent in order to get confidence and relief.
Because of that reason, people put some meanings on things, which is considered with important attitude in recent society in order to block wasteful habit.
>>> Because of that, people out some meanings on things which is considered and important attitude in recent society in order to avoid wasteful habits.
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