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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. Technology has indeed made life easier and convenient.
- T. Beth
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I have a old friend who was intimate with me since we were in middle school and live in New York now.
>>> I have an old friend who was intimate with me since we were in middle school and lives in New York now.
He went to USA before being high school and we promised keeping in touch.
>>> He went to the USA before high school and we promised to keep in touch.
But, at that time, smartphone was not developed and we didn\'t usually use email so we can\'t keep each other posted.
>>> But at that time, smartphones were not developed and we didn\'t usually use e-mail so we couldn\'t keep each other posted.
After few years later, Facebook messenger was released, which help us communicate although being apart from each other.
>>> After few years later, Facebook messenger was released, which helped us communicate although being apart from each other.
While communication technology have been developed more and more, we can communicate with each other using Kakao talk which is App in smartphone.
>>> Because communication technology have been developed more and more, we can communicate with each other using Kakao talk which is an App in the smartphone.
Our conversation is developed with communication technology.
>>> Our conversation has developed due to communication technology.
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