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2019-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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The LGBT communities are hard for people to accept. I think the reason is the faith and tradition. Long time ago, the people thought that to do marrage with a man and a woman. Nowadays,that is against the traditional mind. So I think that is why people are not accepted.

강사 첨삭

That\'s true, [이름]!


Thank you for sharing your opinion regarding this matter. ^^

I agree with your observation.

Someday I  hope the traditions become less close- minded. ^^



~~t. Ally




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The LGBT communities are hard for people to accept.

>> CORRECT!


 I think the reason is the faith and tradition.

>> I think some of the reasons are faith and tradition.


 Long time ago, the people thought that to do marrage with a man and a woman.

>> A long time ago, most people thought that marriage should only be between a man or a woman.


 Nowadays,that is against the traditional mind.

>> Nowadays, that is against traditional thinking.


 So I think that is why people are not accepted.

>> So this is why these people are not accepted.

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