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Hello Jin Young! Thank you for this. I guess it is also influenced by the culture. We know, Western people are way more liberated while Koreans are somewhat more conservative.
- T. Beth
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Korean party culture is very different with Western party, which have main goal on exchange with acquaintance compared with Western party to highlight social intercourse with unknown people.
>>> Korean party culture is very different with Western party where the main goal is to socialize with acquaintances. Compared with Western parties, they highlight social intercourse with unknown people.
Korean think party have goal and meaning that cooperate with each other, distribute output, share happiness or sadness, and spend joyful time with eating foods.
>>> Koreans think that the purpose of a party is to cooperate with each other, distribute output, share happiness or sadness, and spend joyful time with eating foods.
In other words, Korean think that who came in party is more important than information gathered from it.
>>> In other words, Korean think that who came to the party is more important than the information gathered from it.
So, Western and Korean party are very different in concept.
>>> So, Western and Korean parties are very different in concept.
>> OR: So, Western and Korean parties have very different concepts.
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