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Hello Jin Young. Thank you once again for this. I heard about general Yi Sun-shin. He was clever enough to think of a good strategy to defeat the Japanese despite being outnumbered. I remember that on his last breath he said to not let people know about his death.
- T. Beth
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Hunminjeongeum, Korean script, is most famous monument in Korea.
>>> Hunminjeongeum, the Korean script, is one of the most famous artifacts in Korea.
It is ranked on the first among inventions which are thought as the great invention in Korea.
>>> It is ranked as the first among inventions which are thought as the greatest inventions in Korea.
It is also recognized abroad so UNESCO select it as world record legacy.
>>> It is also recognized abroad so UNESCO selected it as a world record legacy.
Another monument is the Turtle Ship which was invented by Yi Sun-shin who was general during Josenon Dynasty.
>>> Another monument is the Turtle Ship which was invented by Yi Sun-shin who was a general during the Joseon Dynasty.
He fight with Japaneses navies using this ship while he was in disadvantage state that he had 12 ships versus Japaneses navies\' 200 ship.
>>> He fought with Japaneses navies using this ship while he was in a disadvantage state having only 12 ships versus Japaneses navies\' 200 ships.
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