Homework

Hello [이름]!

You can definitely write well.

This is quality work and I\'m so proud of you.

One advice I can give you is to avoid restating the same ideas.

If you have already made one point, move on to another aspect of the topic.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

It is true that many students have a gap year before going into higher education.

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Some people believe that having a gap year helps people to discover what they really want to learn in the future.

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However, others believe that having a gap year is a waste of time.

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OR>> However, others believe that such is a waste of time.
On the one hand, some people believe that taking a year out is beneficial because it helps people to discover what they want to learn in the future.

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People can experience many things during their gap year.

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This can help people to discover unknown talents and interests.

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OR>> This can help people to discover their hidden talents and undetermined interests.

For example, a survey has shown that 70% of people who had a gap year are satisfied with their job and they also show better performance in the business world.

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Therefore, it is evident that having a gap year is advantageous because it discovers unknown talents and interests.

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