Homework

Hi [이름]!

What you need to focus on is the organization of your thoughts.

There is a format that you can follow in order to create a great essay.

We\'ll talk about this more in detail during our class later.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

On the other hand, others believe that taking a year out is a waste of time because they should get a job as soon as possible.

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OR>> On the other hand, others believe that taking a year out is a waste of time because it is advisable to secure a job as soon as possible.

Today, the world is competitive and it is difficult to get a job.

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So, people should go into higher education without having a gap year.

>> That is why people should go directly into higher education without having a gap year.

It also helps people\'s career because they can start work fast than people who took a year out.

>> It also helps people in their career because they can enter the workforce earlier than people who take a year out.

Therefore, it is apparent that taking a year out is a waste of time because the world is competitive.

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In conclusion, even though having a gap year can be a waste of time, I believe that taking a year out is beneficial because it helps people to discover their unknown talents and interests.

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