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2019-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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[ESSAY] In 3-5 sentences, answer the question below: >> Talk about your career goals in your current company. Our company provides several services in IT industry. I am in charge one of the services. I work in a data center which runs thousands of servers. My clients want to run their online services on our servers. Thus, My goal is making the systems run without any failure.

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Jean


[ESSAY]
In 3-5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> Talk about your career goals in your current company.

Our company provides several services in IT industry.  I am in charge one of the services.

>> Our company provides several services in the IT industry and I am in charge of one of the said services.


I work in a data center which runs thousands of servers.

>> I work in a data center, which runs thousands of servers.


My clients want to run their online services on our servers.

>> correct


Thus, My goal is making the systems run without any failure.

>> Thus, my goal is to make the systems run without any failure.


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