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Many people say that researching the history of one\'s own family is one of trends in today\'s society.

>> Many people say that researching the history of one\'s own family is one of the trends in today\'s society.

This essay will discuss why people want to research the history of their own family and what is a positive effect of this phenomenon.

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Firstly, researching the history of one\'s own family helps people to identify themselves.

>> Correct

It is important to people to identify who they are.

>> It is important for people to identify who they are.

So, they use their family history to obtain information.

>> That\'s why they want to find out more about their family history.

For example, a survey has shown that 40% of adults who researched the history of their family during teenage years say that researching family history helps them to know about themselves and thier family.

>> For example, a survey has shown that 40% of adults who researched the history of their family during their teenage years say that doing this research helps them to know more about themselves and their family.

Also, they show higher happiness level in thier lives.

>> These people also tend to be happier in their lives.

Therefore, people research the history of their family because it helps them to identify themselves.

>> Correct

OR>> Therefore, people research the history of their family because it helps them to learn about where they come from and why they are the way they are today.