Homework

Hello Kelly! 

Thanks for sending in your composition because we couldn\'t discuss it in the class due to shortage of time. ^_^

~T. Irene~

I wish to share with you a success my friend had achieved.

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 When I was a high school student, I met my best friend suyoung.

>>> Correct.

We are same class, ans she lived near by my house.

>>> We are in the same class and she lived near by my house.

>>> We are in the same class and same neighborhood. 

So, we often got together and studied.

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Besides that, we had same interest in fashion, so we used to go to shopping everyday.

>>> Aside from that, we shared the same interest in fashion. We used to go shopping together everyday.

However, I am busy working nowdays, so we go to shopping once a week.

>>> However, I am busy with work nowadays so we only go shopping once a week.

Even though I got a job 5 years ago, she didn\'t get a job during 5 years.

>>> For the past 5 years that I have been working, she remained unemployed.

The company where she want to go is famous in fashion industry, and many people want to work in that company.

>>> The company which she wanted to work for is a famous fashion brand and competition is quite tight for applicants.

The competition was fierce.

>>> Correct.

However, she didn\'t give up and tried to build her abilities and experiences.

>>> However, she didn\'t give up and tried to increase and develop her abilities and experiences.

For instance, she studied abroad even though she didn\'t have a lot of money and volunteered for children and elderly people.

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>>> For instance, she studied abroad even though she didn\'t have a lot of money and volunteered to care for children and elderly people.

After so many struggles and difficulties, she got a job.

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I am so happy and proud of her.

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So, last month we had a party to celerabrate her.

>>> So, last month we had a party to celerabrate her success.