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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this one. People these days prefer a much convenient life, so living in the city would be preferred.
- T. Beth
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People are social animal and can\'t live alone without other\'s help.
>>> People are social animals and can\'t live alone without other\'s help.
Most of rural areas don\'t have lot of people, even don\'t have people over ten.
>>> Most of rural areas don\'t have a lot of people, even not exceeding a population over ten.
Of course, people living rural area have good physical state because there are little pollution.
>>> Of course, people living in the rural area have good physical state because there is little pollution.
But, they can\'t feel mental delight from socializing with people.
>>> OR: But, they can\'t feel the pleasure from socializing with other people.
I think mental delight affect to health more than environment\'s state so I seem to think people living in city are more healthier than ones living in rural area.
>>> I think mental delight affects health more than the environment\'s state so I seem to think people living in the city are more healthier than the ones living in the rural area.
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