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Hi [이름]!
That is quite true.
Back in elementary and high school, our school didn\'t allow junk food and soft drinks to be sold in our cafeterias.
It helped us a lot in choosing better and healthier options for our meals. ^^
Thank you for sharing your thought!
~~t. Ally
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I don\'t think fast food should be not sold in school cafeterias.
>> I don\'t think fast food should be sold in school cafeterias.
Because fast food is not healthy specially for children.
>> Because fast food is unhealthy, especially for children.
After eating fast food, children is easy to get worse.
>> After eating fast food, children may easily get sick.
Furthermore children\'s body is weak than adult.
>> Furthermore, children\'s bodies are weaker than adults\'.
If they continue eating fast food, their health should be getting worse.
>> If they continue eating fast food, their health would get worse and worse.
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