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> Do you think drinking alcohol is a good way of solving problems?
In order to solve stress, drinking a alcohol have a possibility that connect with alcohol addiction. When drinking alone, people can think they can control their alcohol amount, but they are not conscious of other people so drink more amount than usual amount oneself.
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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. These days, drinking alcohol has been a very common thing for most people to do to relieve stress. It\'s easy and alcohol is readily available anywhere. However, I think people should opt to a healthier way of relieving stress, like watching a movie or hitting the gym.
- T. Beth
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In order to solve stress, drinking a alcohol have a possibility that connect with alcohol addiction. >>> In order to solve stress, drinking alcohol could lead to a possibility of an alcohol addiction.
When drinking alone, people can think they can control their alcohol amount, but they are not conscious of other people so drink more amount than usual amount oneself.
>>> OR: When drinking alone, people would think they can control their alcohol intake, but they are not conscious of other people so they tend to drink more than the usual amount they should.
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