homework
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ESSAY: What three things do you value most in your life right now? Why did you choose them?
I can tell you the three things are my love ones, my health and money.
I think those things are the essencial of my life.
It will change the vaue things but at least, I can say I don't need anything except those three things right now.
I want to live healthy with my love ones in good condtion of the finance like everyone wishes.
If I can choose one thing more, I will choose elegance and beutiful apperance. Frankly speaking, as I am getting older, I am a little bit addicted to the beauty and keeping young looks. But I can delay getting old but I cannot reverse the time. I sighTT
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Hello Ms. [이름]! Thanks for your message! ^_^
~ T. Irene~
ESSAY: What three things do you value most in your life right now? Why did you choose them?I can tell you the three things are my love ones, my health and money.
>>> I can tell you the three things that I love the most : my love ones, health and money.
I think those things are the essencial of my life.
I think those things are the essencial of my life.
>>> I think those things are essential in my life.
It will change the vaue things but at least, I can say I don\'t need anything except those three things right now.
It will change the vaue things but at least, I can say I don\'t need anything except those three things right now.
>>> There are a lot of things are valuable but right now they are not as important to me as those three things.
I want to live healthy with my love ones in good condtion of the finance like everyone wishes.
I want to live healthy with my love ones in good condtion of the finance like everyone wishes.
>>> I want to live a healthy life with my love ones and in a good financial condition like what everyone wishes for.
If I can choose one thing more, I will choose elegance and beutiful apperance.
If I can choose one thing more, I will choose elegance and beutiful apperance.
>>> If I can choose one more thing, I will choose elegance or beautiful appearance.
Frankly speaking, as I am getting older, I am a little bit addicted to the beauty and keeping young looks.
>>> Frankly speaking, as I am getting older, I am a little bit addicted to beauty and keeping myself look younger.
But I can delay getting old but I cannot reverse the time. I sighTT
>>> I cannot reverse time but I can delay getting old. I sighTT
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