homework

2019-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

학생이 쓴 원문

ESSAY: Have you ever had imaginary friends when you were young? When I was a young girl, I beleived that I came from another world like a star in space. I thought, I was a princess of the star but I made a big mistakes therefore I got punishment living in earth. Whenever I was scolded from my parents, I cried and prayed to god for going back to my real world. Do you want to ake me that I still think I am alien ? Well, I am 47 years old, that means I have been living hear for 47 years. I don't remember anymore where my real worldm where the star is is. But from time to time, I am still thinking when my punishement will end and go back home with a small smile.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ms. [이름]!  Thanks for your thoughts regarding this topic. Wow! You had a strong and wild imagination when you were young. I only dreamt that I was adopted and my real RICH parents are looking for me. Ha ha ha. ^_^

~ T. Irene ~

ESSAY: Have you ever had imaginary friends when you were young? 
When I was a young girl, I believed that I came from another world like a star in space.

>>>   Correct. 

>>> When I was a young girl, I believed that I came from another world like a star in outer space. 
 I thought, I was a princess of the star but I made a big mistakes therefore I got punishment living in earth.

>>>   I imagined that I was a princess from a start but I made a big mistake and I got punished by living on earth.
 Whenever I was scolded from my parents, I cried and prayed to god for going back to my real world.

>>>   Whenever I was scolded by my parents, I cried and prayed to God to send me back to my real world.
 Do you want to ake me that I still think I am alien?

>>>  Do you want to ask me whether I still think I\'m an alien? 
 Well, I am 47 years old, that means I have been living here for 47 years.

>>> Correct. 

>>>   Well, I am 47 years old now so that means I have been living here for 47 years.

I don\'t remember anymore where my real worldm where the star is is.

>>>  I don\'t remember anymore where my real world is or which star I came from.
 But from time to time, I am still thinking when my punishement will end and go back home with a small smile.

>>>  But from time to time, I still wonder when my punishment will end so I can go back home.   


파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·