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2019-05-16 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think it\'s more courageous to show one\'s vulnerability. Most people only want to show their perfect self, because it takes a lot of courage to show their vulnerability in this regard. There\'s a problem, and I don\'t know what else to write here. Now my mom told me to stop using my phone, I think I have stop using it.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Seong Won!
Thank you for writing an essay today.
It was short but it\'s nonetheless great. Keep it up and keep writing! ^^
I\'ll be waiting for more essay from you. :)
I agree that showing your weaknesses is way harder that showing your strengths.
I guess that\'s why many people pretend that they\'re okay even when they\'re not.

Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry


I think it\'s more courageous to show one\'s vulnerability.

>> CORRECT!

Most people only want to show their perfect self, because it takes a lot of courage to show their vulnerability in this regard.

>> CORRECT!
There\'s a problem, and I don\'t know what else to write here.
>> CORRECT! 

Now my mom told me to stop using my phone, I think I have stop using it.

>> Now, my mom told me to stop using my phone and I think I have to stop using it.

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