Homework 9
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. What is your greatest achievement so far?
A. My greatest achievement is that I traveled abroad for 10 months with a very little budget. It was when I was 22 years old that I started my traveling. Even though I had saved money for travel, setting aside some money for transportation such as airfare, I was a little short on the cash I needed for this trip. But I managed to travel within the budget. I came up with an idea to stay abroad as long as possible. I worked in each countries in exchange for room and board. I was not only able to stay longer but also I experienced various cultures. After I came back to Korea, I became a lot different than before the trip. I\'ve got a sense of achievement and confidence to do something hard I need to achieve.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bomi! Thanks for sharing your experience! Quite an achievement indeed. For most people, just like me, it\'s a real big issue of money when we would like to go on a trip abroad. There should always be careful planning, saving and budgeting. But, with a limited budget, you were able to achieve it! Good for you! ^ ^ I hope to do that soon! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
My greatest achievement is that I traveled abroad for 10 months with a very little budget.
>>CORRECT
It was when I was 22 years old that I started my traveling.
>>It was when I was 22 years old when I started traveling.
Even though I had saved money for travel, setting aside some money for transportation such as airfare, I was a little short on the cash I needed for this trip.
>>Even though I was able too save, it wasn\'t quite enough for my transportation expenses.
But I managed to travel within the budget.
>>CORRECT
I came up with an idea to stay abroad as long as possible.
>>CORRECT
I worked in each countries in exchange for room and board.
>>CORRECT
I was not only able to stay longer but also I experienced various cultures.
>>CORRECT
After I came back to Korea, I became a lot different than before the trip.
>>CORRECT
I\'ve got a sense of achievement and confidence to do something hard I need to achieve.
>>I felt a sense of achievement and gained more confidence to do something hard.
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