Homework 9
학생이 쓴 원문
I enjoyed talking with you Gemma!
Today\'s homework gave me chance to think.
I appreciate your concerns. Enjoy your day!
Thank you :)
강사 첨삭
Hi there Diego! Thanks again for your essay! I enjoy checking and appreciating your ideas! Your smart with your perspectives and I know that you write based on your experiences and insights. Keep it up!>>> TEACHER GEMMAThese days, older people who have retired often choose to spend money on themselves (for example on holidays) rather than save money for their children.
Is this a positive or negative development?
I respect the decision old people spending money on themselves rather than save money for their children. >>> I respect the decision old people to spend their money on themselves rather than saving for their children.
These days children don\'t take care their parents. >>> These days children don\'t take care of their parents. Taking care of old parents is a custom in agrarian society.>>> CORRECT~!^^ That is why parents gave their assets to their children.>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, nowadays, children do not live together with their parents. >>> CORRECT~!^^They leave their hometown for jobs. >>> CORRECT~!^^Parents should take care of themselves. >>> CORRECT~!^^Money they had saved is only method to rely on.>>> The money they saved is the only source to rely on. Since average life expectancy is rising, they should consider the future.>>> CORRECT~!^^ I also believe children are already grown up and can make living for themselves.>>> I also believe that children can support themselves if they are already old enough. They are adults who got economy powers.>>> CORRECT~!^^ They can sustain their lives.>>> CORRECT~!^^Children should be independent from their parents. >>> CORRECT~!^^Children should not be burden for their parents.>>> CORRECT~!^^ This is the most ideal track for both parents and children.>>> CORRECT~!^^ However, Korean society is getting worse maintaining this track. >>> CORRECT~!^^Young generation are suffering from finding jobs.>>> CORRECT~!^^ Their independence age is getting older. >>> CORRECT~!^^This situation gives big pressure to parents. >>> CORRECT~!^^Also young generation give up their marriage because of real estate problems. >>> CORRECT~!^^They cannot afford debts when they buy their house. >>> CORRECT~!^^So parents should help them when they buy their house.>>> CORRECT~!^^ This custom steals parents\' asset and make both children and parents poor. >>> CORRECT~!^^ I agree that old people should spend their money for themselves. >>> CORRECT~!^^However, the reality is getting worse.>>> CORRECT~!^^ I hope our society becomes better.>>> CORRECT~!^^
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