Homework 9/14
학생이 쓴 원문
"Old ways won't open new doors!"
When i was a student in middle school, my parents always forced me to go to good an university.
They believed that If I graduate from university in Seoul, I can get a job in Samsung or Hyundai or another high-paying job.
Or, If I can't do that, they wanted me to get a test of government officer.
Because my parents wanted to do that and they thought it's the best way to live happily when were young.
Almost adults including my parents always think in their own way.
Though it makes sense in almost cases, the world is changing right now.
A circumstance of economy, science, society is changing.
So raising my strength is more important than getting a good job.
Like nobody knew that Nokia, Kodak would fail, nobody knows what the correct way is.
Old way is just one of common ways to open door.
The only man(or woman)who can make a correct key for new doors is you.
강사 첨삭
Hola, Ian! :)
I hope that you are doing good this Thursday night!
Do you have any special plan for tomorrow?
You are doing good and you will surely learn a lot by doing your homework so keep up! :)
Enjoy your night and see ya tomorrow.
~ T. Lorna^-^
>> When I was a student in middle school, my parents always forced me to go to a good university.
They believed that If I graduate from university in Seoul, I can get a job in Samsung or Hyundai or another high-paying job.
They believed that If I graduate from university in Seoul, I can get a job in Samsung or Hyundai or another high-paying job.
>> They believed that If I graduate from a university in Seoul then I can get a job in Samsung or Hyundai companies or from another high-paying companies.
Or, If I can\'t do that, they wanted me to get a test of government officer.
Or, If I can\'t do that, they wanted me to get a test of government officer.
>> If I can\'t do this, they wanted me to get a test to become a government officer.
Because my parents wanted to do that and they thought it\'s the best way to live happily when were young.
>> My parents wanted me to do one of these because they thought it\'s the best way to live happily when were young.
Almost adults including my parents always think in their own way.
Almost adults including my parents always think in their own way.
>> Most adults including my parents think always in their own way.
Though it makes sense in almost cases, the world is changing right now.
Though it makes sense in almost cases, the world is changing right now.
>> Correct!
A circumstance of economy, science, society is changing.
A circumstance of economy, science, society is changing.
>> Circumstances with regards to economy, science and society is changing.
So raising my strength is more important than getting a good job.
So raising my strength is more important than getting a good job.
>> So, raising my strength is more important than getting a good job.
OR:(Did you mean?)
>> So, polishing my qualification skills is more important than getting a good job for me nowadays.
Like nobody knew that Nokia, Kodak would fail, nobody knows what the correct way is.
Like nobody knew that Nokia, Kodak would fail, nobody knows what the correct way is.
>> Nobody knew that Nokia and Kodak wouldn\'t be successful nowadays because no one can completely predict what will happen in the future.
Old way is just one of common ways to open door.
Old way is just one of common ways to open door.
>> I think that old ways are just those common ways for us to open the door to do better.
The only man(or woman)who can make a correct key for new doors is you.
The only man(or woman)who can make a correct key for new doors is you.
>> The only person who can be the key to a new door for you is yourself.
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